Apr '12 5
Today's raw National Poetry Writing Month (NaPoWriMo) poem is modelled on Robert Frost's 'Stopping by woods on a snowy evening', which ends with the enigmatic lines '...And miles to go before I sleep / And miles to go before I sleep.'

I've used the same rhyming scheme and the same number of verses.

Let me know what you think in the comments box.


Stopping in a Garden on a Thursday evening

This Garden, oh Gethsemane,
My Father knows I want to flee
But faith this paltry life transcends:
My duty to help mankind see.

I spent the evening with my friends
Broke bread, shared wine, now evening ends
My Father's wish I can't delay
On me his winning plan depends.

But Judas, you will me betray.
And Peter, by the breaking day
You'll shake your head three times, deny,
Then cock will crow, to your dismay.

And even yet, I wonder why...
My friends, I bid you warm goodbye
Not long to go before I die
Not long to go before I die.


Posted by Jennifer Liston

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  1. Susie says:

    *It's beautiful Jennifer. I love this one. Susie

  2. Jen says:

    *Oh Susie, thank you so much for commenting and I'm so glad you like it. I hope you're keeping well; I think of you a lot. xoxoxo

  3. Mike says:

    *Possibly your best so far Jen, it's VERY good. Almost has a vilanelle feel to it. Nice to do it on Good Friday eve as well. And I love the title - doesn't give anything away.

  4. Russ says:

    *Brilliant

  5. Jen says:

    *Thank you Russ! :-)

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